Friday Fictioneers: Water Lilies – C

I pledgeAnother week, and another prompt for the Friday Fictioneers graciously provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The task is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. You can find all the Fictioneers’ stories when you click on the Froggy. Please read, comment, and if you like, join the fun. Everyone is welcome.

People like me who like and need constructive criticism label their posts with a C, according to the guidelines of the Friday Fictioneers Concrit Subgroup.

Oh- and this is my 200th post! 🙂

Image © Erin Leary

Water Lilies

“Don’t go there!”

This place is magnificent. The lake is covered with water lilies, their blossoms a sea of colour blazing in the sun.

“It’s dangerous!”

Birds and insects are the only creatures around. Their sounds lull me to sleep.

“There’s something in the water!”

A cool breeze wakes me up. Waves ripple the lake’s surface and reveal a crumbling construct; wooden poles stand in two even rows. This must have been a wharf once.

“People have disappeared!”

The two rows move away from each other. I blink. This isn’t wood.

“You only see it just before it kills you.”

(100 words)

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49 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Water Lilies – C

    1. Who knows? Teeth perhaps? Or some sort of grinder? An emerging swamp dragon? I’ll leave that to the reader. 😉 I’m glad you had fun with it, Rochelle. Thank you.


    1. Thanks for the congrats and thanks for the comment. 🙂 I’m glad the story worked for you. Maybe what’s there is what’s left of your monster…

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  1. I like the structure of this piece and the contrast of the warning to the narration of feelings. There was a subtle buildup to the ending. Nicely done.

    Congratulations on your 200th post!

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  2. Ooh, something using the lilies for cover before it strikes. Good mix of happy thoughts and the scary reality. Since there are warnings, it would seem others might have disappeared. This sounds like a type of swamp creature as in the old movies except this one’s real. The narrator better listen. Well done, Gah. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  3. I just read this piece — so sorry for not having stopped by earlier!

    Loved your story — the structure is perfectly handled (strangely, I wrote a poem about forty minutes ago, and it had a sort of similar, interrupted structure), and the imagery is exquisitely handled.

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