Defiance – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

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Every Wednesday we get a new picture prompt for the Friday Fictioneers, a writing challenge graciously hosted by our Fairy Blog Mother Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
The task of the challenge is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. You can find all the Fictioneers’ stories when you click on the little frog. Please read, comment, and if you like, join the fun. Everyone is welcome.

 


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Defiance

The lights reflecting on the water make the place almost look beautiful. But only if you are blind to the militia strutting around, shooting people like game, and acting like they own the place.

The place—it’s just a campground where displaced people like me found refuge in tents and campers after the rising sea swallowed our town. A refuge until THEY came.

When I saw the leer that one of these creeps gave me, I decided to leave.

I hike at night, my dog at my side. I’m heading towards the mountains. Maybe I’ll find people who fight back.

(100 words)


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48 thoughts on “Defiance – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

    1. Thank you Iain. I may be overly pessimistic, but to me it seems that people learn nothing from the past. Many of those whose families were refugees after WW2 now rage against ‘too many immigrants’. People only remember when it’s convenient. Good old days and all that.

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      1. It is an interesting suggestion, but it changes the tone of the piece. On my first reading, the ‘maybe’ struck me very forcibly – she’s setting off entirely in faith, with no guarantee of finding like-minded people.

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        1. It would change the tone. I pictured a very young girl/woman, finding her best chance is running, so the maybe was meant hopeful. But she could easily have become really desperate, then the must would have been stronger. 🙂

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    1. Thank you Rochelle. I know, right. Things that are going on ‘behind the scenes’ scare me, not only in your country. They may be the minority, but they are ready to use violence.

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  1. Vive la résistance!

    This plays more like a premonition than fiction. Dystopian futures seem more and more plausible all the time. There’s always somebody ready to take advantage of a disaster. I’d be one of the first to die. My naïveté wants me to believe people would band together and help each other in such situations. There are those who would, and there are those who would see an opportunity to take advantage of those people. This is an excellent take.

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    1. Thank you Sandra! Yes, I realized last week that I haven’t been around since August. My work has become so stressful that I can’t manage to think about stories in the evenings, just do mindless stuff. I’m on vacation at the moment, we’ll see how it goes from next week on…

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  2. Good story, and an excellent take on the prompt. I love the unexpected way you’ve linked campervans to the rising sea-level. You’ve judged the pace of the story well, so that her flight seems like a logical culmination of the oppressive conditions she faces.

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    1. Thank you! It’s odd, isn’t it? TWecan be compassionate and helpful–and some can be so cruel, or becoming indifferent to cruelty… we’re all mad.

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    1. It might. On the other hand, if they encounter effective resistance, THEY might realize that they are mostly not able to sustain themselves. Thank you Björn.

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  3. I hope they hurry deep into the woods, and find sanctuary, sadly it is getting ever harder to find sanctuary. But tonight whilst walking my dog, I was lucky enough to watch an otter living at peace with nature.

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    1. Thank you! If you can live off the land and know how to build shelter, the woods would be a safer place in any case. Walking with a dog can be very relaxing. My dog would go bonkers trying to hunt the otter though. 🙂 We don’t have any nearby, but if she sees rabbits, foxes or deer: oh dear.

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