The course is fun (see previous post on the topic), I’m sailing through the theoretical part and learn a lot. I’m seeing poetry with different eyes and my admiration for poets has grown immensely.
The practical aspect of the course, however, leaves me in despair. All too often, I hardly unerstand what the prompt is. The forums do help, but not much since there is little feedback. I’m not going to post my offerings there. I’m torturing you, my friends, you’re kind.
This weeks topic was metaphors and similes. The prompts were to write a conceit and to develop a focused image system. Oh my…
That’s what a metaphor does; through its collision of two different things, it creates something more flavorful, more vivid, more rich.Douglas Kearney, California Institute of Arts,
This course is challenging me big time. I have no idea if I even come close. Here’s the conceit: A conceit is like an extended metaphor, but it argues for the metaphor itself.
Your love for me is like an onion My angry words cut into your skin. I’m slicing and dicing and Your sharp aura of indifference —Feigned, I hope— Brings tears to my eyes. The spice you bring into my life —Like an onion to my food— Is purging its blandness And worth the tears. The outer layers, Shrivelled from protecting what’s inside Are peeled away in hopes to find within A fresh new spring of love And not a rotten core.
I’m always welcoming constructive feedback.
The second prompt Is ‘One of us, one of us: all figures of speech refer to a general thematic unity
Summer Days Air shimmering in the heat. Bright white light dimmed orange by closed eyelids. Red skin, rows of boiled lobsters; The smell of sunscreen in the air. Cooling off of heated limbs Amidst glistening reflections on the lake. Blue-green beams illuminate its depth As I dive. I’m guided by the light. Goose-pimples smoothed by Towels warmed from sun-baked soil. Relaxing and refuelling my energy. It’s My place in the sun
This is wishful thinking because this year, summer doesn’t want to come. It’s cold and rainy, which is good for nature, but less so for my mood. I’m not asking for heat but a bit of sunshine and a bit higher temperatures would be nice (right now it’s 10 degrees Celsius outside).
Stay tuned, three more weeks.